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Natalie

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Thanks, AMassie! Sure! We're in the editing phase, but I have the MS open. Here's a quick cut and paste. In this scene Derek is flashing back to the last time he saw his father, Mark, when he was a young child-

"I'm gonna ask you this one more time," he said. “And you better gimme the right answer." His voice was now slow and controlled. "It was on the box on top of the toilet this morning. And now it's gone. Where did it go, Angela?"

            The air left the room as she stepped forward. “You check your arm?” 

           Mark’s eyes widened, but Angela held her ground.

Derek felt his body start to fold in on itself. His tiny fist tightened around the bag he was hiding. He tried to focus on the cartoons in front of him, but the characters on the screen began to bleed together into a wild mash-up of colors. A low chuckle began to brew deep inside of Mark’s chest.

            "You're funny," he said quietly. "You're really funny, you know that?"

Mark smiled a wide smile and shook his head back and forth, the chuckle rumbling like thunder inside of him. Derek listened to the laughter grow like some kind of grotesque beast. It snaked through Mark’s body from his chest, into his nose, and then up into his throat where he was no longer able to contain it and had to open his mouth to let it out. His whole body shook with laughter. It surged through him in great big waves that finally crested with a few big snorts and chokes that had him bending forward to hold onto his knees for support. With his back hunched over, Mark turned his head toward Derek.

"Your mom's a regular riot, ain't she boy?" He was hardly able to catch his breath. At first, Derek thought he sounded genuinely amused. Derek felt his lips curl up into little a smile and nodded. He'd never seen his father laugh so much before. It was kind of funny. He giggled a little and felt a sense of relief wash over him, but as he looked over at his mother, Derek saw that she wasn’t laughing. Angela stood frozen in place. There was a look of caution in her eyes that immediately silenced him. Mark watched as the smile faded from his son’s face. He followed his eyeline to Angela.

“Why ain’t you laughin’?” Mark straightened up and swung his leg out dangerously in Angela’s direction. The two now directly faced one another.  “Your son thinks it’s funny.”

Angela said nothing. Mark rubbed at the stubble on his chin. "’Least he has a sense of humor."

As his parents faced each other in silence, Derek thought he saw a brief flicker of something in his mother's eyes. Then, in what seemed like an instant, she threw down the basket of clothes that were on her hip and bolted for the front door. In one sweeping movement, Mark reached out and grabbed her by her ponytail. Her head snapped back like a rag doll.

"How funny are you now?!" he screamed as he threw her down to the ground.

AMassie

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Daniel, it wasn't intentional, but let's call it a happy accident.

Raymond, have you heard of apophenia? The human brain loves to make connections so much that sometimes it attributes meaning where no meaning exists. The same phenomenon that lets us see shapes in clouds sometimes makes us see omens in tea leaves.

David, sorry to hear about the food poisoning, but thank you for the warm greeting.
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No problem! Thank you for the concern.

Natalie, I'm glad to see your progress with Eleonor! I can't wait for the release! 

I've also taken on a new story: Storyteller (tentatively titled) by Nicholas Bylotas. It's a wonderful book by a great storyteller that explores the ever important theme of stories and their importance in our lives. 
Natalie

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Eleonor has been terrific. Love working with her. Storyteller sounds delightful. Congrats on it, David!
Author Raymond Gaynor

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I have to admit I'm an avid fan (and writer) of politico-techno thrillers including, of course, sci fi. In truth, I wrote my first full length novel "The Hyperbolic Curve" at 16 years of age. While it was never published, I had the dubious honor of papering all four walls of my bedroom with pink rejection slips from the best sci fi publishers of the time. I've never actually published a sci fi work, but I guess I work out my sci fi frustrations by writing techno thrillers. You could say that QUANTUM DEATH is almost a sci fi work, given how exotic the quantum physics referred to in the story is, what with it's "quantum strangeness," "quantum entanglement," and the idea in the story that for brief moments an "object" can simultaneously exist in two places within the multiverse. These are all inherent in the "Quantum Death Machine" that is at the very heart of QUANTUM DEATH. 
Author Raymond Gaynor

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Apophenia? Guess I've got that aplenty! I actively seek out connections "where no one has gone before" (which, I guess, also reveals my lifelong penchant for Star Trek). You could say "Live long and prosper!" is pretty close to my own stated philosophy of life. 
AMassie

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Natalie, that excerpt is great. I'm looking forward to reading more.

I think that's a great philosophy life philosophy, Raymond.

It's been great chatting with you all, but I'm going to go get some lunch. Wishing you all a good month.
Natalie

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Thank you[smile] Lovely chatting with you all. It's about time for me to run, too. Have a great rest of the weekend and will *see* you all next month!
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THE TURTLE DANCES by Daniel S. Janik - Excerpt #3 (Family Rated) 

"Chapter 13 - The Turtle Dances

    "You know what?" The young man offered, thinking of the two turtles they'd been watching. “We danced so well together, I think we might just win!"

"You know, I think so, too,“ replied his partner. “Thanks to our turtle-friends out there," the two finished together.

The couple returned, hand-in-hand, to the dance floor to join the line of competitors. Waiting for the judges to announce the awards, the young man turned to his now self-assured partner, touched the tip of her hand softly much the way the turtles had, and smiled. "The turtle dances," he said softly.

"Yes," she replied, while unseen in the distance, Isla and Surf happily executed a perfect bounce, twirl and slide. "The turtle dances!"

Continuing the unique tradition of "talking up" rather than down to readers, THE TURTLE DANCES demonstrates the power and beauty of narrative storytelling at its finest. Designed to re-awaken curiosity, discovery in both children and adults, the book is an excellent way to introduce literacy and associated lifelong learning pleasures.

Mulit-award-winning author, naturalist, artist, photographer and movie producer Daniel S. Janik resides in Honolulu, Hawaii with his wife and dance partner, Setsuko Tsuchiya. Together they welcome Hawaiian Green Sea Turtles to Hawaii throughout the year. An Oklahoma painter known for her vivid, almost photographic renditions of nature, illustrator Ruth R. Janik created the 28 naturalistic line drawings in the book specifically for children to color.

THE TURTLE DANCES is the third in the Savant "Color-Me-Please" series and the third in the author's "Pacific Rim Naturalist" group of children's books.  

THE TURTLE DANCES by Daniel S. Janik
80 pp.  8.25" x 6" Softcover book with 28 B&W "Color-Me-Please" Illustrations
ISBN 978-0-9886640-1-2

GET 15% OFF THE INDICATED PRICE BY ORDERING FROM THE PUBLISHER
USING "OCTSALE" DISCOUNT CODE AT CHECKOUT FROM 15 OCT TO 15 NOV!

Available from the publisher, printer, Savant Bookstore Honolulu, Amazon.com, online bookstores and other fine bookstores everywhere.

Daniel S. Janik
Multi-Award-winning author of
     THE TURTLE DANCES (Savant 2013)
          Also available, though no on sale, at http://www.amazon.com//dp/0988664011
     A WHALE’S TALE (Savant 2009)
          Also available, though not on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/1442105062
    SOURDOUGH SCOTT'S BEDTIME FAIRY TALES FROM ALASKA (Publication Consultants 2005)
          http://publicationconsultants.com/books/view-our-books/all-alphabetic/sourdough-scott-s-bedtime-fairy-tales-from-alaska-detail
     FOOTPRINTS, SMILES AND LITTLE WHITE LIES (Savant 2008)
          Also available, though no on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/1438252358 (softcover book)
          http://www.amazon.com/dp/B001G0MOVG (Kindle eBook)
     THE ILLUSTRATED MIDDLE EARTH (Savant 2008)
          Also available, though no on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/1438262418
     LAST AND FINAL HARVEST (Savant 2008)
          Also available, though not on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/1438268416
     UNLOCK THE GENIUS WITHIN (Rowman & Littlefield Education, 2005)
         Also available, though not on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00BY13D2Q
    A NEUROBIOLOGICAL THEORY AND METHOD OF LANGUAGE ACQUISITION (Lincom Europa, 2004)
          http://www.lincom-shop.eu/shop/article_ISBN%25209783895867637/LSNB-01%3A-A-Neurobiological-Theory-and-Method-of-Language-Acquisition.html
          http://www.amazon.com/dp/3895867632
    HOW TO CHOOSE THE BEST ENGLISH LANGUAGE SCHOOL IN THE USA (Authorhouse, 2006)
          http://bookstore.authorhouse.com/Products/SKU-000356497/How-to-Choose-the-Best-English-Language-School-in-the-USA.aspx
          http://www.amazon.com/dp/1425934803

Award-winning poet with works appearing in
     VOLUTIONS (Savant 2014)
          Also available, though not on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/0991562216
     BELLWETHER MESSAGES (Savant 2013)
          Also available, though not on sale at https://www.amazon.com/dp/0988664046
     FIFTY-EIGHT STONES (Savant 2012)
          Also available, though not on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/0985250658 (softcover book)
          http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00I5RVQXK (Kindle eBook)
     WAVELENGTHS (Savant 2011)
          Also available, though not on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/0982998767
    FIRST BREATH (Savant 2010)
         Also available, though not on sale at http://www.amazon.com/dp/0984555226

Author website at http://janik.yolasite.com

dvdshinsato

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Thank you all for joining us in the Savant October 2016 chat! Have a great weekend.
drjanik

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Well, it's less than 30 minutes before we end this chat, so this is the time to post those last excerpts and comments. I just looked out the picture window, Raymond, and there before me is a full moon smiling back (my Japanese wife would say it's a rabbit pounding mochi -- a kind of sticky rice). Either way, I feel it is more than auspicious for our global PRE-HOLIDAY SALE that's just begun. This is the time for everyone to stock up on books as holiday gifts. A book is always an appreciated gift, and it says something about the giver that is complimentary as well. 
Author Raymond Gaynor

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That's great advice about stocking up on books as holiday gifts while they're on sale. Personally, I always gift Savant Books and Publications -- I guess everyone expects a book from an author. [rolleyes]
drjanik

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I've always said that while prose is the bread and butter for authors, poetry is it's heart and soul. So, don't forget to submit up to five poems for the 2016 Savant Poetry Anthology -- http://www.savantbooksandpublications.com/poetry.php. Our anthologies have launched several author's careers, and are highly regarded throughout the world, having repeatedly placed in the London Book Festival. Submission deadline is midnight 31 December 2016, which while it may sound a long ways away, with the holidays almost upon us will come sooner than you think. The work is open to submissions from poets everywhere, the only restriction being that the poem must be unpublished at the time of submission. 
drjanik

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It's been a great chat. Don't forget to tell everyone in the world about Savant Books and Publications' PRE-HOLIDAY SALE on softcover books, CDs, DVDs, merchandise and eBooks going on RIGHT NOW through 15 November 2016!

Bye, all!
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